今日练习：

More and more people use the mobile phone or computer to communicate, and no longer write letters to each other. Some people think the skills of letter writing will soon disappear completely. Do you agree or disagree? How important do you think letter-writing is?

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    Recently,it's known as one of the most popular phenomenons that more people use the mobile phone or computer to communicate in today's society.And the most people no longer write letters to each other.To this issue,some people think the kinds of letter writing will soon disappear completely.However,others assert that the letter-writing couldn't be replaced.In my opinion,I agree with the second view.
    Those who hold the first opinion think that the letter-writing will disppear.In their view,with the developing of information techology,they have learnt to that the messages will soon reach riceivers.After years of conditioning,most of them have develeped an unshakable failth in the mobile phone or computer.They think that they can get or sent the information in time.Especially,the kind of high-speed information will offer wealth to the beneficiaries in a business.
    But on the other hand,there are also quite a few people who strongly advocate that the letter-writing couldn't disappear.They believe that the letter-writing is a expression of the emotions.It could express the writters' emotion much deeplier than other approaches.
    As for me,I stand on the side of the second one.On the one hand,in an outlying mountain area,most of people couldn't use the mobile phone or computer and send the message by letter only,So the letter-writing couldn't be replaced.On the other hand,a good letter should be keeped for ever,and the letter-writting could do it.In a word,the kinds of letter writing won't soon disappear completely.

豆子对我作文的批改：（学习中……）

    Recently,it's known as one of the most popular phenomenons that more people use the mobile phone or computer to communicate in today's society.And the most people no longer write letters to each other.To this issue,some people think the kinds of letter writing will soon disappear completely.However,others assert that the letter-writing couldn't be replaced.In my opinion,I agree with the second view.
    Those who hold the first opinion think that the letter-writing will disppear.In their view,with the developing of information techology,they have learnt to[不要to] that the messages will soon reach riceivers[receivers].After years of conditioning,most of them have develeped an unshakable failth in the mobile phone or computer.They think that they can get or sent the information in time.Especially,the kind of high-speed information will offer wealth to the beneficiaries in a business.[这段话用的不错哈]
    But [On the other hand 就等于but,去掉but]on the other hand,there are also quite a few people who strongly advocate that the letter-writing couldn't disappear.They believe that the letter-writing is a expression of the emotions.It could express the writters' emotion much deeplier[deeper] than other approaches.
    As for me,I stand on the side of the second one.On the one hand[for one thing],in an outlying mountain area,most of people couldn't use the mobile phone or computer and send the message by letter only,So the letter-writing couldn't be replaced.On the other hand[for another],a good letter should be keeped for ever,and the letter-writting could do it.In a word,the kinds of letter writing won't soon disappear completely
[on one hand, on the other hand一般是说两个截然相反的东西，注意使用]