【春风行动——006号学员】
今日练习（要求至少200字）：
Nowadays, computer is used more and more in education. Do you think in which areas computer is more important and in which areas teachers are more important？
我的作文：（请批改~~
）
Presently, the computers have been universalized in many large and medium-sized cities and economically developed areas in our country. A new form of universities that is built in some websites. The emergence of such universities makes a tremendous impact on traditional education, so that "life-long education" can be easily achieved. Hence, individuals strongly feel the importance of the computer is increasing obvious.
Indeed, the computer plays a significant role in education because of its powerful functions. With the rapid development of science and technology, many high-tech means are applied to the field of education and teaching,. School education and teaching methods are constantly updated, multi-media computer-assisted instruction has gradually entered the classroom. Furthermore, it brings school education new vigor and vitality. And the traditional mode of education and teaching has profound changes. Computers provide vivid image tools for teachers and effectively reduce the academic burden on students, because the creation of context stimulates students numerous interests in learning.
However, it is possible to interpersonal relationships tend to downplay. And harmful information in Internet culture and computer culture, it might lead to the failure of the youth community. A teacher not only gives people knowledge but also teaches people how to become a.person who contributes to our society. Teachers find every child's potential and encourage children to explore knowledge independently, so that children's gifts are at their acme.Therfore, the role of a teacher cannot be replaced perfectly by a computer.
In a word, computers and teachers are indispensable in modern teaching. Neither of the two can be dispensed.
批改后的作文：
Presently, the computers have been universalized in many large and medium-sized cities and economically developed areas in our country. A new form of universities that is built in some websites. The emergence of such universities makes[exerts] a tremendous impact on traditional education, so that "life-long education" can be easily achieved. Hence, individuals strongly feel the importance of the computer is increasing[increasingly,副词修饰形容词] obvious.
Indeed, the computer plays a significant role in education because of its powerful functions. With the rapid development of science and technology, many high-tech means are applied to the field of education and teaching,. School education and teaching methods are constantly updated, [and]multi-media computer-assisted instruction has gradually entered the classroom. Furthermore, it brings school education new vigor and vitality. And the traditional mode of education and teaching has profound changes. Computers provide vivid image tools for teachers and effectively reduce the academic burden on students, because the creation of context stimulates students numerous interests in learning.
However, it is possible to interpersonal relationships tend to downplay.[it is possible that interpersonal relationships tend to be downplayed.] And [Given the]harmful information in Internet culture and computer culture, it might lead to the failure of the youth community. A teacher not only gives people knowledge but also teaches people how to become a.person who contributes to our society.[参考：teachers not only inculcate the knowledge, but instill high moral values and principles that... as well ] Teachers find every child's potential and encourage children to explore knowledge independently [and critically 叠音看起来比较舒服，常见组合：think independently and critically], so that children's gifts are at their acme.Therfore, the role of a teacher cannot be replaced perfectly by a computer.
In a word, computers and teachers are indispensable in modern teaching. Neither of the two can be dispensed.
posted @ 2008-05-16 14:20
Mika 阅读(8)
评论(0) 编辑 收藏 所属分类:
新3学习ing 网摘收藏