本周大家写作中普遍出现的问题有两个：

第一，没有在第一段给出自己的中心论点。大家要注意，英文的议论文写法，一定要在第一段给出你自己的明确的观点。这次很多同学都犯了这个错误，在豆子大人的修改之后，大家一定要吸取教训，下次不可以再犯这个错误咯！记住了，在第一段或者说第一部分就给出自己的观点，同意或者同意，或者说是同意两个观点里的哪一个观点，不要一会儿写写这个观点，一会儿写写那个观点，到最后么匆匆一句话总结，这是不行滴！

第二，有些同学使用了缩写，豆子对大家的文章都进行了仔细的修改，已经告诉大家不要在学术文章里出现缩写。那小美要说的是，缩写只用在一些非正式场合，或者就是你自己做你笔记的时候，其它时候尽量不要用缩写，因为缩写会显得你在写东西的时候非常随意，不是很认真，而且如果有些缩写不同的人对它有不同的理解，也会产生歧义。所以，下一次在写文章的时候，请大家统一不要用缩写，但是在小组里讨论的时候，如果你想用什么缩写也是可以的，但是为了养成大家的好习惯，小美在这里建议统一不要用缩写。

下面，来贴几篇本周的优秀作文，小美是直接拷贝粘贴的，可能部分里面有一些笔误之类的小美都没有改过来，大家看的时候心领神会就行啦，嘻嘻～

豆子的：
Eight years in the new millennium , human beings have realized that parenting and schooling play an increasingly important role in students’ adult development, yet there is no consensus on what constitutes a perfect education. Traditional ideas require good students to always follow orders from teachers, while new thoughts suggest that a more independent and strong-minded student can be better prepared for the competitive society. Speaking for myself, I find the latter one is more reasonable.

Convincing evidence can be made on the ground that students with more freedom are more likely to have advantageous characters compared with their rivals. To begin with, in the 21st century, critical thinking and independent consideration are necessary qualities — from group discussion in the university to decision making in company, from international affairs to individual trivias, only those with highly analyzed skills and determinations can achieve a success. It would be hard-pressed to imagine how a student who has never made his own decision can easily address these problems. Further, rules and authorities are not always right. Science and culture are developing and some stereotypes should be abolished rather than be followed. To illustrate, some teachers and parents used to think it is reasonable to check students’ bags or even diaries for a better control, which virtually invades upon the privacy of students and poses heavy spiritual burdens.Last but not least, too much control and undistinguished obedience are apt to extinguish students with special talents. Genius may range from art to sports to academic study, however, modern education merely focus on academic results and numerous students have to come to terms with the frustrating results that their pearls are cast before swines.

On the other hand, obedient awareness has exerted certain beneficial impacts in groups, given that leaders’ commands can be effectively and efficiently enforced without disagreement. Despite of these, even the most smartest leader or authority may make mistakes and executers are granted to have the right to impugn things against the truth. Thus, student s should realize their rights from their school-time upward to rationally follow the rules and commands.

Based on the arguments discussed above, it is conceded that the sense of obedience is of great help with carrying out orders from the top level, however, other charactes such as critical thinking ability, advanced ideas with modern times and creativity in different areas are far more important. All of them can only be gained with more freedom and understanding from parents and teachers.

allrounder8的：
Nobody could have failed to notice the fact that parents and schools are playing an intensely important role on the development of children’s life . However, There has been much controversy over obeying rules, with each party owning convincing evidences .Some individuals harbor the idea that the students should always obey rules which are instituted by their parents , schools and social. On the other hand, there are many characters who are of the opinion that students controlled too much will not be well-prepared for their adult life. From my perspective, I hold the view that both sides have something right, yet I am inclined to agree with the latter point of view.

There is no denying the fact that quiet a few rules and guidelines of necessary must be obeyed, such as not stealing, robbing, setting fire, and so on. If a child is brought up with them from the start, the more they learn to grow and carry on the same way when they get to their teen years. Moreover, if they just can't obey those rules , they will have to take the consequences, which can be really serious. Imagine, if everyone go through life and do as they pleased, the world will be a total disaster. We all have rules ,by which we know our limits and how far to go , need to be obeyed in one form or another, like in the workplace, whilst we are out just doing simple things like the weekly shopping.

In contrast, we should not and can’t obey all of rules and guidelines. First and foremost, we need some kind of free ,to some degree, but that should be basis on rules .Secondly, some kind of rules don’t apply to everyone, which is only fit for talent or special individuals . Last but not least, our ingeniously devised or thought may be thoroughly quenched by a slice of rules and guidelines, which are not always perfect. Coincident with the development of the social and culture, Some kind of bad customs and laws will be abolished.

From what has been discussed above, we can draw the conclusion that we must obey rules , but not all of them! During we grown up, there is still a long way to walk. Only have a positive concept of obey and free, can we finish our whole life smoothly.

elysion的：
With the rapid development of people's living standard, the parenting and schooling raises wider issues of national interest.Some people require good students to follow orders from teachers and parents, while others claim that a more independent student can be better prepared for the competitive society. In my viewpoint, I think the latter one is more reasonable.

Nowadays,as the competition in every field is much more ever before,parents pay more attention on their children's quality education for the purpose of a success life in future.Most people believe children who are controlled too much will not be well-prepared for their adult life.They think student's ability can't be fully demonstrated under controlling and pressure.Indeed,many students are suppressed by a series of rules.It leads that some students not dare to give their diferent views which are contrary to these rules.I find it will kill children's innate characterstics and their own view that helps them being narrow-minded.

On the other hand,obeying rules can slove a large number of disputes and improve efficiency. Despite its conduciveness, formulating and implementing rules may generate many mistakes and abusing authority.
In addition,I doubt constitutor is not bigoted and rules is really reasonable.

At the present,the demand of talented person is urgent.Society needs some person who have special idea as well as challenge of sprint. From my analysis,some freedom education is propitious to children's growth.So I hope that some parents and teachers can give them some free spaces.And don't only ask them to obey rules.Meanwhile I believe them will have a diverse and colorful future.

songyy的：
Some people think students should always obey rules while others believe students who are controlled too much will not be well-prepared for their adult life.
As it is said that everything has two sides.We can not say anything is absolutly correct while we can not say anything is totally wrong.As my view, I would like to agree on the second one if I have to chose.
In the first instance,obeying rules means you must do what others told you before you use your brain .However it will also cut the throat of your creativity meanwhile.We are living in a world which is full of creation and as a result creativity is becoming a necessayr ability that a morden hunmem must have.
Secondly,we can have more opporunity to experience. Obeying rules can decrease the rate of making mistakes but at the same time we can not get benefit from our faults.We must become mature by experiencing again and again.Noone can grow up just by remembering some theories and obey some certain rules.We can learn how to take our own responsibilities,how to think of before we make decisions and how to use our brain In our lives.
Thirdly, obeying rules is also bad for our society.If all of us are only good at obeying rules,we are justequal to some machines with human’s bodies and our society will not develop .Thus our ability of thinking will decrease.
In all,I think the second opinion that students who are controlled too much will not be well-prepared for their adult life is much wiser.

王子的：
As eight years passed in the new century, the education industry changed a lot. Right now, students are either obedient as a puppet, or rebel as a stubborn steed. Some people say obedient is good, we must obey the rules in the school, and obey the law in the society when we grow up, while others think students who are controlled too much will not be well-prepared for their adult life. In my opinion, I think these two opinions don't contradict themselves.

As I am a student myself, I have my own experiences. Students these days are arrogant and think they are the whole cheese. They always think they are right and never listen, even never obey the basic discipline. Just imagine the life when these kinds of students have grown up: They smoke, drink, dress neither fish nor fowl, which they called "personalities". After they have grown up, their headstrong actions - so called "personalities" soon turn to crime or fail in career: drug, stealing, unemployment... These will be the consequences they will face in the future if they don't obey the rules when they're young. Furthermore, as they grow up, they must obey the law in the society, so they must learn to follow their laws when they're young.

Yet, obey the rules don't mean listen to others' orders all the time. People who do this isn't a human, it's a robot, a puppet. You must have thoughts, you must make decisions, you must think, to balance whether the decision is right or not. If you don't, you might fail to self-support when you grow up and no one's going to make decisions for you the whole lifetime. So, learn to make right decisions and think of others' advices at the same time.

Overall, students can be both obedient and independent. Be a person that obey the rules but not blindly follows; be a person that has his own voice but doesn't listen. I think this doesn't make a contradiction.

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