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The society would benefit from the ban on all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purposes and can even be damaging. To some extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Today is digital and information-based time.TV and computer take increasingly important role in our informational life.And the advertisement is a branch of media which also interspers[intersperses] our world.I do believe adertisement is very necessary to the society.
Frist of all.you can see many advertisements on the net and television.Adversement can widely introduct some new commodities over the world.Especially it can help productors extend the width of their vendition.At the same time,adertisement is a rich and generous income of television station.Secondly, at present media is one independent power in our society and advertisement also is one strong force in media too[too 和 also 用一个就可以啦].Some responsible and beneficent corporations often use advertisement to educate and promote people moral.As while,it can promote enterprise image. Attitudes toward this point of view,adverisement is filled of social avail.
Maybe however this argumrnt is[有这种表达吗],it only skims the surface of the problem.Too much emphasis placed on its merit might make us overlook other facts that some people use the press to disseminate such [such指代不明]misleading information。Yet, these phenomenon is on the increase on the TV set leading [causing] that some customers are tricked.
It may be true that the reason of advertisement is condemned,but it doesn't mean it should be forbidden.In my opinion,we should admit it brings[删掉] so many benefits [brought by ads] for us overweights[单数] its disadvantage. We'd better to manage it perfectly,such as establishing comprehensive monitoring system and identifying quality system training.We do not think such an abnormal phenomenon will last long.I trust with advertisement,our tomorrow will be more colourful.