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Nowadays, computer is used more and more in education. Do you think in which areas computer is more important and in which areas teachers are more important？
Recently, the debate over whether people think in educational areas computers is more important and in which areas teacher are more important. People retain diverse attitudes towards this hot issue. Before presenting my view, I intend to explore both sides of the argument.
Many people claim that people living in modern city should accept the new methord which teach theri children effectively and adapt to new information-based time . To begin with, by accepting that computer is used more and more in this areas, you can find and enjoy a comfortable and digtal life. Moreover, it is a necessity for some students to adapt to the competitive society, because it may impose an adverse influence on their living and study. Furthermore, to a separate minority,it may take negative on him. It will undoubtedly exert a negative impact on relationship and communication between students and teacher.
Some other people strongly hold that it is necessary to ues computer in some teaching process,but that it can't instead of teacher.Firstly,computer teaching is lack of interactive activity . Therefore, it is week for some student who is in some hard problem. Secondly, by helping students , teachers and students can more easily together to enhance their strength to work hard. Thirdly, students in journey studying may more or less have physical or psychological problems, so teacher is helpful for students to get together to help each other.
From the above discussion, we can see that there is actually some truth in both statements. Personally, I am in favour of the latter view. After all, even if study is your own task, you still have to accept some useful suggestion from teachers and classmates.Communication is essentiall for our life.
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Nowadays, computer is used more and more in education. Do you think in which areas computer is more important and in which areas teachers are more important？
Recently, the debate over whether people think in educational areas computers is more important and in which areas teacher are more important.[缺少主句的谓语] People retain diverse attitudes towards this hot issue. Before presenting my view, I intend to explore both sides of the argument.
Many people claim that people living in modern city should accept the new methord which teach theri children effectively and adapt to new information-based time . To begin with, by accepting that computer is used more and more in this areas, you can find and enjoy a comfortable and digtal life. Moreover, it is a necessity for some students to adapt to the competitive society, because it may impose an adverse influence on their living and study. Furthermore, to a separate minority,it may take negative on him. It will undoubtedly exert a negative impact on relationship and communication between students and teacher.[这一段结构有点问题，开头中心句子说电脑的好处，然后又说有副作用，完全和中心句相反，鬼佬肯定会看糊涂]
Some other people strongly hold that it is necessary to ues computer in some teaching process,but that it can't instead of teacher.Firstly,computer teaching is lack of interactive activity . Therefore, it is week[weak] for some student who is in some hard problem[s]. Secondly, by helping students , teachers and students can more easily together to enhance their strength to work hard. Thirdly[finally/lastly], students in journey studying may more or less have physical or psychological problems, so teacher is helpful for students to get together to help each other.
From the above discussion, we can see that there is[are] actually some truth in both statements. Personally, I am in favour of the latter view. After all, even if study is your own task, you still have to accept some useful suggestion from teachers and classmates.Communication is essentiall for our life.
为了给你妹妹做个榜样，多多练习把，尤其是文章的结构多多考虑，鬼佬的习惯是提出中心句，然后进行分析，所以每段话应该扣准一个主题句子来说
posted on 2008-05-16 09:09
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