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People can perform everyday task, such as shopping and banking, as well as business transactions, without meeting other people face-to-face. What are the effects on both individuals and society?

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Along with the economic development, telecommuting have[has] become more[increasingly更好] popular in our life. People can perform everyday task more quickly and easily without meeting others face to face , such as shopping and banking ,as well as business transactions. [Like]Every blade has two sides , this phenomena also has it’s advantage and disadvantage .
For the individuals ,they can have much more time to enjoy themselves because they no[don't] need to take a long time seeking for the appropriate goods as usual, for the business companies, this new trade way can not only brings[bring] they[them] effective works[jobs/work,works指文学著作] ,but saving[save] a large sum of cost as well. And to the whole society, the largely using of telecommuting is a sign of high level substance development of a county and it can promotes making more progresses in the science.
However, activiting without meeting also have many drawbacks. As it’s know[known] to all ,human as a socializing[social] animal have the demand of sharing their moods and opinions with others, while telecommuting make people have less opportunities to communicate with others and it may leading[lead] to a result that people become more and more indifference to the surroundings in a shortly future. Numbers of members using telecommuting also relate to the problem of our health. nowadays ,increasing number of people suffer from obesity mostly because of the lack of exercises . and this kind of new way will make this trouble even worse
In a word ,as we [are]experiencing the convenient and high effective of the telecommuting ,we should not neglecting[neglect] the shortages of it