雅思写作专用答疑区

大家对于雅思写作的任何疑问都可以在这里提出,老俞有问必答:-)
posted @ 2007-08-03 20:18 俞伟国 阅读(1847) 评论(87)  编辑  收藏 网摘收藏

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#1楼 2007-08-15 22:36 | 周毅博
我18日考,能给我点建议吗?
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#2楼 [楼主]2007-08-15 23:54 | 俞伟国
18日考的同学请留意“分析建议类”topic在8月-9月可能会考到,常规考题还是注意青少年教育类话题,科技类可以基本排除,因为上周考过了。
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#3楼 2007-08-20 21:41 | 孙斌全
我25号考,能给我点建议吗?
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#4楼 [楼主]2007-08-20 22:05 | 俞伟国
继续关注“分析建议类”,25号考老题的可能性较大
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#5楼 2007-08-21 19:34 | 孙斌全
这是我的作文,老俞请帮忙改一下
Multi-cultural societies, which are mixed with different ethnic people, bring more benefits than drawbacks, to what extent do you agree or disagree?


Nowadays, with the development of globalization, multi-cultural societies is becoming a topic on which people have been divided. Actually, there is an opinion that a society which is consisted of people from different countries and ethnic can bring more benefits than harmfulness. From my personal part, I reach out both arms to enhance this point of view with these following reasons.

To begin with, in terms of economic, compared with an ordinary society, the one with varied culture has a larger consume. As we all know, every ethnic has its unique custom in eating, clothes, daily life. So the different consumption need infused into vitality for the economy and drive it to increase.

Further, the different customs and habits will change the living environment of the region and even make it change into a global village, which will also be able to make the local life interest and funny. As an old saying goes, “Be it ever so humble, there is no place like home.” A majority of people with different cultural background would like to live where like their hometowns, so there must be many buildings of various styles in a place, which offers a golden chance to local residents to travel the world in a day.

Last but not least, the fusion of different cultural language will not only produce a large number of new vocabularies, but also push society to develop. For an example, with the peaceful rising of China, Chinese is constantly influencing English, let it produce many Chinese type vocabularies, making English language more flexible than before.

All in all, I believe that the advantage brought by various cultural societies is not only reflected in the economy and language, but it also manifests itself in people’s daily life. Any one is willing to agree with the point that the benefits come from multi-culture societies overweight the problems they cause.

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#6楼 2007-08-22 17:45 | 我是谁
地道的范文到哪里去看啊?拜托啦!
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#7楼 2007-08-22 21:16 | Suede
余哥,我25号考,这是我写的第一篇大作文,您帮我看看,拜托。
Some people think that schools should select their pupils according to their academic ability. Others believe that young people with different abilities should be educated together. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Just as a famous proverb once noted, nature passes nurture, which clearly indicates the enormous significance and tremendous influence education has on every one of us. However, the dispute about the aim of education has been long under fierce discussion and opinions vary. Pupils’ being ranked according to their academic levels is one of them, which, meanwhile, is just opposite to those holding the belief that mixing up different types of young people with different aptitudes at school would be much more helpful to serve the terminal goal of education.

Academic ability, evaluating the students’ level of mastership of the lessons, tends to focus on the aspect of knowledge students need to acquire in education. With a solid foundation of academic knowledge, one can keep up with the Joneses in the ever-changing society, being much more competitive, thus he or she would not be deprived of core competence and avoid being eliminated in the fierce competition. There’s no denying that the knowledge and qualifications one accumulated in his early age will be of gigantic conducive to the later career development.

On the other hand, the concept that educating young people with different aptitudes together tends to pay more attention to the experience students will obtain in different fields. With knowledge and skills and a great range of experience acquiring everyday, students can associate theory to practice and thus covert knowledge into experience, which can definitely activate the social value and utility of their academic learning. Theory without practice never makes perfect, hence, indeed, experience is the terminal of knowledge.

In my point of view, it is both crucial that students should obtain knowledge and acquire experience, hence I prefer a combination of these two opinions: we could establish a sound system to group students with similar ability of learning into a general category, such as Art Section or Science Section, so that we get a decent balance between these two contradictory ideas.

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#8楼 2007-08-23 13:07 | Catherine
老师,上周雅思作文“完美开篇”的作业,麻烦批改:)
Exercise 1
At present,the trend of globalization and the prosperous society in China have made international travel prevalent.With the development of economy and the improvement of living standard,the amount of people who desire to make trips overseas has been being booming.However,in terms of the problems and disadvantages the phenomenon has brought,different people hold varied opinions.From my point of view,to travel abroad is a pleasant choice as long as you can afford the high expense.
Exercise 2
Currently,the respect to the aged given by people of different countries and varied culture is disappointingly insufficient.It is a serious social problem that senior citizens are not being treated very well.In my opinion,there're a number of factors contributing to the phenomenon and in this article,I intend to prodict the situation it might result in as well as analyse the reasons.
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#9楼 [楼主]2007-08-24 15:08 | 俞伟国
大家写的作文直接发到我的邮箱akata@126.com吧!
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#10楼 2007-08-26 23:58 | vincy
余老师,我感觉作文写的很烂,不想练习写,还有的方法?
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#11楼 [楼主]2007-08-27 10:52 | 俞伟国
不写的话很难提高,要么你就拼命看范文,多少也会有点帮助.
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#12楼 2007-08-27 20:13 | TING
老师 我是9.8号考 考什么类型的题目概率大一点呢?

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#13楼 2007-08-27 22:56 | vincy
我是YZ050班的,我写了剑3上TEST1和2上的作文,发到你的邮箱里,麻烦帮我批改一下,谢谢.
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#14楼 2007-08-28 22:37 | Vincy
收到你发来的邮件了,谢谢俞老师!
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#15楼 [楼主]2007-08-29 13:38 | 俞伟国
9.8考什么取决于9.1考什么。
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#16楼 2007-08-31 16:04 | Jack
你好,俞老师。我是南汇加强班的050,是10月13号考。想问你,我现在应该怎么准备作文?小作文怎么练习,大作文按照你讲的对开头,中间段和收尾多练习,那话题来讲准备哪些?还需要准备些什么?谢谢
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#17楼 2007-09-06 18:54 | Ada
老师,我写了剑三test1里的作文,发到你邮箱了,麻烦老师帮我修改下!我10月20号考试,需要着重准备哪些topic呢?谢谢
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#18楼 2007-10-01 20:57 |
老师好,我10.13考试.有什么建议,尤其是作文这回预测一下.我这几天再准备一下.谢谢啦.
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#19楼 2007-10-05 13:32 | Akata
10月13号考至少基本不用担心流程图啦!^_^
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#20楼 2007-10-22 15:11 | 宣颖
老师 To what extent do you agree or disagree?这种作文要不要俩方面都讨论啊?
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#21楼 [楼主]2007-10-22 19:17 | 俞伟国
不一定啊,可以写单边的,那就是100%赞成/反对嘛!(虽然我不是很喜欢这种单边的结构,但是it's OK)
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#22楼 2007-10-22 21:13 | 宣颖
老师谢谢,我25号考.我是暑假南汇班的,那个班超长的.



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#23楼 2007-10-22 21:17 | 宣颖
老师我上次8月25号考的,我遇到的题目就是"老年人要不要自己养活自己,问你在多大程度上同意或不同意",我出了考场就觉得自己挺模糊的,不知道自己有没有最终下定论.


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#24楼 [楼主]2007-10-24 16:13 | 俞伟国
8月25号的题目是这个吧: Some people think that it is necessary to save money for the life after retirement. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
你考的难道是G类?
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#25楼 2007-11-09 13:53 | 甜甜
老师,我11.17考,还没自己写过,四级水平,请问该怎么练作文,重点看哪方面的?谢谢
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#26楼 [楼主]2007-11-10 10:58 | 俞伟国
@甜甜
三大重点话题始终值得关注:
1. 青少年教育类
2. 政府决策类
3. 社会现象类

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#27楼 2007-11-21 17:09 | Suede
雅思考7.0新东方有没有讲学金阿
我10.25 考的
听力7.5 阅读8.5 写作6.5 口语5.5
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#28楼 [楼主]2007-11-21 19:32 | 俞伟国
@Suede
总分7.0好像没有奖学金的,不过如果你是我的学生的话我倒可以考虑个人给你点小小的奖励哦:-)
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#29楼 2007-11-28 09:50 | ibook
俞老师 我是YQZ004的学生 参加12.15的考试
我发了篇作文到你邮箱
麻烦有空帮我批改下 :p

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#30楼 2007-11-28 20:13 | easy
老师好呀
想问问关于作文的评分
是不是只要字数到了就一顶有5分呢(小和大作文)
还是有别的什么因素?谢谢
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#31楼 [楼主]2007-11-28 20:34 | 俞伟国
@easy
还有不能偏题
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#32楼 2007-11-29 09:37 | 嘿嘿
老师好哟
我是12月15号考,想问问老师作文什么是重点?
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#33楼 [楼主]2007-11-29 12:05 | 俞伟国
@嘿嘿
我会提前一周出预测的
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#34楼 2007-11-30 16:15 | Suede
当然是你的学生...暑假南汇全日制的...你的写作不是很高...口语很猥琐...奖励是什么
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#35楼 [楼主]2007-11-30 20:20 | 俞伟国
@Suede
奖励是一顿KFC......
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#36楼 2007-12-09 13:23 |
15号的预测啊 老师靠你了
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#37楼 2007-12-10 20:46 | Elaine
老师,我是您Y136班的学生.现在大四,过六级.目前小作文练得差不多了.大作文还没开始复习...08年2月2日考IELTS,作文方面能给再我些建议吗?2个月不到的时间要怎样利用才最有效呢?Thank you,Akata!
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#38楼 [楼主]2007-12-11 14:00 | 俞伟国
@Elaine
每天写一篇文章,然后给老师或者是外语好的朋友或者是老外改。

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#39楼 2007-12-11 16:05 | hyi
@俞伟国
老师啊我要G类的预测
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#40楼 2007-12-11 16:06 | hyi
老师我要12月15日的G类预测
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#41楼 [楼主]2007-12-11 16:42 | 俞伟国
@hyi
G类预测可以参考3G雅思网的论坛“G类雅思专区部分”
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#42楼 2007-12-11 20:04 | hyi
@俞伟国
老师我打不开那个网啊,而且我还是相信你给的预测,你就贴出来吧
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#43楼 2007-12-11 20:26 | hyi
老师帮帮忙贴出来吧,我前一阵就上不了这个3G网,到现在还是上不去
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#44楼 2007-12-30 18:24 | Reese
老师,……agree ot disagree? 可不可以保持中立?
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#45楼 [楼主]2007-12-31 10:11 | 俞伟国
@Reese
可以!但我不推荐,因为写起来比较麻烦。
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#46楼 2007-12-31 21:01 | Reese
老师,如果中立应该怎么写呢?谢谢:)
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#47楼 [楼主]2008-01-01 09:20 | 俞伟国
@Reese
分四段
开头
主干部分两段,分别对所讨论观点的可取之处和不足之处进行分析
结尾 得出改良式的观点
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#48楼 2008-01-01 17:19 | Reese
谢谢老师提点:)
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#49楼 2008-02-02 22:35 | Ee
老师,请问你会贴2月23号的预测吗?
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#50楼 [楼主]2008-02-02 23:00 | 俞伟国
@Ee
会的,提前一周出。

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#51楼 2008-02-03 11:47 | 一游
老师
我是23要考了
上月中才刚开始了解雅思。。。
还要争取考6.5。。惨啊

你总结的那三个重点话题很准的哦
但是具体的什么结构我都不了解哦
能不能大概讲讲啊

还有
练笔的陋文能不能帮忙看看阿(看了别吐阿)

甚感激阿~~
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#52楼 [楼主]2008-02-03 22:03 | 俞伟国
@一游
你是哪个班级的?具体的写作结构上课应该都讲过的啊?


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#53楼 2008-02-04 20:07 | 一游
俄,因为我学校的关系,我很晚才知道学校那个项目要考雅思。。。
出于无奈我只上过徐汇的点题班,而且上写作那节课还没去
是那个班上的同学向我介绍你达^^~~

所以就抱着一丝小小希望来看看
觉得你这里讲的比我自己琢磨的不知道有效多少类!
(那三个分类也是这里看到的拉。。。)

就要考了
慌啊。。。

所以发贴来SOS了哦
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#54楼 [楼主]2008-02-05 14:47 | 俞伟国
@一游
那你可以问你同学借一下写作的教案以及笔记,上面有你需要的内容。

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#55楼 2008-02-05 15:41 | 一游

知道了
尝试联系一下

还有
能不能帮忙看下文章啊
给点建议就好^^
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#56楼 [楼主]2008-02-05 19:11 | 俞伟国
@一游
可以的,你问你的同学要一下我的邮箱。

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#57楼 2008-02-16 17:15 | 香蕉人
老师 是不是二月里的其中一次是考流程图,或地图啊

2号和16号都没有考,那就是23号考吗

我是23号考的 头大啊???

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#58楼 [楼主]2008-02-16 22:56 | 俞伟国
@香蕉人

不是,是第一季度(1月到3月)很可能会考一次流程图

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#59楼 2008-03-07 19:44 | yhf
老师 我4月5号 考试,可不可以给点建议啊
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#60楼 [楼主]2008-03-07 20:44 | 俞伟国
@yhf

考前一周会出预测

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#61楼 2008-03-09 12:00 | 7511505
老师三月十三号这次小作文突袭可能性大不~
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#62楼 [楼主]2008-03-09 18:28 | 俞伟国
@7511505

你是说地图题?

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#63楼 2008-03-09 19:52 | 7511505
恩是的,地图提和流程图都蛮可怕的~
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#64楼 2008-05-10 23:08 | 潇湘儿
俞老师,我4月24日在北京考了一次雅思,可写作只有5分,我平时练习基本是6的水平,逻辑也没什么大问题,可为什么这么低呢?还有,老师,小作文要怎么准备啊?可以用模版么?
我22号还要再考一次,请老师指点啊!
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#65楼 [楼主]2008-05-10 23:42 | 俞伟国
@潇湘儿
“平时练习基本是6的水平”这个结论是如何得出的?
小作文可以用模板的。
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#66楼 2008-05-12 14:16 | qin
俞老师,我想提高英文写作能力,不针对雅思,主要增强英文本身的语言活用,请指点!!
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#67楼 [楼主]2008-05-12 18:29 | 俞伟国
@qin
多看Economists上的文章。

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#68楼 2008-05-12 23:34 | qin
@俞伟国
谢谢俞老师
家庭幸福 儒雅犹在 师风长存
祝福!
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#69楼 2008-05-12 23:39 | 潇湘儿
先谢谢老师
老师,我2月份上过新东方的课,不过是在北京上的:)交过的作业老师打分是6啊
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#70楼 2008-05-13 00:06 | 潇湘儿
老师,再请教您一下,大作文如果被发现用模版的话,是不是就在5分或以下了?
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#71楼 [楼主]2008-05-13 00:31 | 俞伟国
@潇湘儿

作文被认定为"prepared answers"时在原来得分基础上减一分。

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#72楼 2008-05-14 23:11 | 潇湘儿
太感谢老师啦~~~~~~~~~~
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#73楼 2008-06-29 18:14 | miao
我今年9月6号考,考什么类型的题目概率大一点呢?
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#74楼 2008-06-29 18:16 | miao
老师,我自我感觉写作水平不太高,利用假期两个月怎么才能提高快一点呢?

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#75楼 [楼主]2008-06-29 23:04 | 俞伟国
@miao
作文预测只能提前一周进行,提高写作水平建议上一个新东方的精品班,自学的话多看《Economist》

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#76楼 2008-07-04 21:20 | miao
谢谢老师,那提前一周怎么预测呀?
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#77楼 [楼主]2008-07-05 09:27 | 俞伟国
@miao
我会提前一周在博客上发布作文预测的。

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#78楼 2008-07-06 09:59 | anya
老师
7。12的帮我预测下
谢了
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#79楼 2008-07-06 11:23 | ppo
老师
我大作文老是超时,字数写得太多,收不住,有时写到350字了。怎么办呀,还有一个月就考试了!
谢了
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#80楼 [楼主]2008-07-06 11:57 | 俞伟国
@ppo
我以前也碰到过这样的情况,后来也因此设计出了能够保证字数在280字左右的具体结构,在我的作文课上《结构解密》这个单元就是讲这个内容的。
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#81楼 2008-07-13 16:12 | fly
Today, more and more developing countries are expanding tourist industry. Why is it the case? Do you regard it as positive or negative?
老师,请问写文章的时候应该是主写Why is it the case还是Do you regard it as positive or negative,谢谢
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#82楼 [楼主]2008-07-13 22:42 | 俞伟国
@fly
这个题目应该算Report,reasons+effect总数为4个即可。
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#83楼 2008-07-15 13:54 | miao
老师,临考前一周应该做些什么准备?
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#84楼 [楼主]2008-07-15 21:57 | 俞伟国
@miao
做题,总结错误。

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#85楼 2008-07-17 09:34 | miao
作文和口语方面呢?
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#86楼 [楼主]2008-07-17 18:45 | 俞伟国
@miao
口语先收集最近常考的topic,自己先写model answer。
作文的话找一篇有范文的topic,自己先写一遍,然后对照范文找出不足之处。

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