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老师,我9月1日在财大考试,作文几号球您大概什么时候能公布?
老师国定阵营的五星老师都谁呀？别给我们太多神秘感了！谢谢啦！
老师~~我想问一下剑5 TEST1 的TASK1这个图的ALL THE TRENDS怎么写?还有就是饼图里面的2号句型是用于极端最高跟最低的数据,最高数据就用COMPARATIVELY THE MOJORITY OF 写但是最低比如只有1%这个怎么用这个句型呢?急盼回复!
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There is much discussion nowadays as to whether or not different young people should be educated in the same school,and how school should choose their students. Diverse contributing factors can be identified. In my essay,I would like to present my point of view.
Some people think students should enter different schools according to their academic ability. That means if you want to enter a famous school, you must study better than other students. The competition brings pressure, so that they have to spend more time on study. It is helpful especially for those small kids who haven't realized the importance of study. It seems to be beneficial, but it still have its disadvantages. Academic knowledge is not the only to learn. If schools select their students only depend on their school reports, that may force students spend too much time on study. When they grow up, they will meet problems like housework,communication,or how to take care of themselves. So I think all we have to do is to control the pressure at a reasonable level.
Other people believe that different young people should all enter the same school. For those who made mistakes while they hadn't found out the significance of study, they will still have chance to be educated like others. So that they can retrieve their mistakes and find a good job in the future. But in my opinion,this isn't necessarily a good thing, because if there's no competition, there's no pressure. Many pupils may waste their time on TV or computer games. Moreover, it's ridiculous to educate students with different talent in a same way. Why must an athlete spend a lot of time on a complicated mathematical topic? Would it be helpful if a popular singer learns geography very well?
From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that both sides have their advantages and disadvantages. And I believe, with the reformation of our education system, it will become more and more advisable.
我是国定路YZ042B的学生，这次按照老师给的8月份模拟写作题写了两篇文章，希望老师能帮忙改下~
（其实是我找不到小新老师说的传说中的“文章集中营”在哪里。。。所以。。。。就。。。。 >_<! ）
小新好哈~~
我让雅思的前任考官帮我看了几篇作文，他一直说要let your own voice come out。而且他还强调，千万避免用metal edification 这样的词。我开始写的时候，用了很多华丽的词汇，他才给我6。5，后来他说了之后，我就按照自己写的写了，词汇很一般很一般很一般，他居然说可以得7分，世界人民震惊了！！！
所以哦小新你说这可怎么办哈？是按你说的写还是。。。
小新老师好啊，这个是我第一次写雅思的文章，是你上次说的红书的P78 有空的话，麻烦看下，谢谢拉~
红书p78
In 1970, coal covered comparatively a majority of the electric energy production in the US, while nuclear accounted for a tiny margin of it. Meanwhile, 12%, 16% the electric energy production was shared by oil and hydro respectively. The remaining 24% was due to the natural gas. However in 1980 the percentage of coal crept up by 4%. Also, between 1970 and 1980, the electric energy production was up 10-fold. On the other hand, the percentage of natural gas in1980 reduced nearly twice as much as that in 1970, and hydro fell down gently from 16% to 12%. Despite the rising and the falling, oil almost maintain stable at nearly 11%.
第二次上你的课 发现感觉又不一样了 感谢你为大家提供那么好的资源
小新老师帮我看两篇小作文吧
快考试了 不知道自己现在什么水平。。。
小新老师给评个分吧 感激不尽！！！
白皮书 P73
The two charts here generally reflect different views of people on major causes and the expense of adult education.
Obviously, from the bar chart, the majority can be easily identified as people who believe it is the adults’ interest in certain disciplines or desire to attain better qualifications that forces them to study in specific areas. The former opinion accounts for 40 per cent which is a slightly 2 per cent higher than the latter one. Also, there are a noticeable amount of people realizing would regard obtain certain knowledge as a way of assisting the current job at 22%. 40 per cent is equally shared by people who study to seek for promotion in one’s occupation and greatly enjoy the learning process. In comparison, a smaller proportion considers adult education as a spring board to a new or better working environment. Only about one tenth of all people feel that those mature people are looking for new friends in such a kind of study.
The expense of each subject is dramatically disputed as well. Most people insist it is adults’ responsibility to pay one’s own fees. There are ones who believe the burden should be included in employers and taxpayers’ obligation occupying 35% and 25% respectively.
白皮书 P126
The line chart and the bar chart indicate the variation of the steel price during 15 years that is immediately after 1985 and the 5 leading steel manufacturers of the globe in 2000.
As the line graph depicts, apparently, the steel value reached an acme at $500 per ton in 1995. What attracts my attention most, however, is that the undulation of the figure was tremendous in a short period. Especially in the last 5 years from 1995 to 2000, the difference between two extremes expanded to nearly $300 each ton, which was turned out to be the most significant price discrepancy on the line graph. Also, the most rapid slump which was approximately one half declines of 1995 occurred in the same period, following immediately after reaching the summit. Nonetheless, the surging price of the previous 10 years was considerable as well. Besides the short subsidence in about 1992, the soar was quite steep in the rest time of the period.
China, as the biggest steel producer shown on the chart, yielded 218 million tons in 2000. Another 240 million tons were nearly shared equally by Japan and US which took the second and third place respectively. Russia followed after US at 72 million tons, and the least of the five was Germany which had 47 million tons in the same year.
小新老师我来这里报道拉。恩呢，你的传授不等于我们的掌握，需要我们自己的态度和努力的！很谢谢老师！
老师好!
谢谢老师关于复习给我指点了迷津,豁然开朗中
终于可以逃出背单词的苦海了
我会跟着老师的进度写作文的
到时候再贴上来给老师看看,还望不吝赐教!
其实关于考试,一直相当紧张中
这次是下了决心来考雅思的(所以知道的人99%都不支持)
准备考3次(不要笑我,因为真的觉得自己基础较差)
但是如果考不出,关于留学的梦这辈子都得放弃了
因为自己的年纪已经到了,没办法,现实很残酷
再次感谢老师及时的指正,让我放松了不少
我会按老师说的去努力的
小新老师，我是Y139的同学，昨天整理笔记太晚了，只好今天起来再写作业啦。两篇文章帮忙评一下吧，谢谢您！
破纸 P7
The table shows the average family expenditure in Britain. All the trends can be categorized into 4 groups with falling in items such as Food, rising in items including Housing, fluctuating in Household goods and services and stabilizing in Other items.
The general trend of the Household goods and services increased comparatively dramatically, reaching a peak at 14% in 1996, which was the similar case with the trend of Transport and communications. Housing accrued within a range of approximately 4%, reaching a peak at 16% in 1996. So did the trend of Recreation, entertainment and education, which was the opposite with that of Tobacco. The percentage of Alcoholic drink reached a plateau at 7% in 1967 and decreased to 4% in 1996. This was true of the trend of Fuel, light and power. The trend of Food crept down, averaging out at about 20%. What’s worth mentioning is that Other items, not making its debut until 1977, remained stable at 1%.
破纸 P9
From the charts we can see the percentage of people employed in different types of industry during the period from 1970 to 2000 in Britain and China.
All the trends can be categorized into three groups with increasing in the percentage of Agriculture of Britain, Computer Industry and Finance of China, fluctuating in Computer Industry and Finance of Britain and Manual Labour of China, decreasing in Agriculture of China.
In Britain, the percentage of people employed in Agriculture crept up, averaging out at nearly 20% while that in Manual Labour alternated, reaching a peak at 61% in 1970, bottoming out at 20% in 1990. This was contrary to the trend of Computer Industry. The trend of Finance fluctuated within a range of approximately 10%. As in China, the Manual Labour rose and fell, taking an average of about 30%, which was almost the opposite with the trend of Finance. The percentage of people employed in Computer Industry soared, reaching an apex at 40% in 2000, while in Agriculture it ebbed within a range of about 30%.
We can also witness from the charts that most of the employed people in Britain were in the industry of Manual Labour while in China it was Agriculture who made up the most percentage.
What is worth mentioning here is that since the total percentages in 1970 of Britain, 1970 and 1980 of China are more than 100%, it indicates that some people were engaged in several industries. On the other hand, the overall percentages in year 2000 of Britain add up to below 100%, which may because that some people were engaged in other industries unmentioned.
All the trends can be categorized into 4 stages with falling in items like Food, rising in items such as Housing, fluctuating in Household goods and services and remaining stable in Other items.
Household goods and services fluctuated dramatically, reaching a peak at 14 in 19996 and bottoming out at 7 in 1977. Transport and communications soared sharply, reaching a summit at 16 in 1996 and hitting a trough at 9 in 1967. Ohter goods and services slumped with a range from 14 to 8. Housing boom, averaging out at 14. Similarly, the trend of Recreation, evtertainment and education accrued with an average of 9 in 1977. This is the opposite with the trend of Tobacco, which abated with an average of 4 in 1977. Alcoholic drink reached a plateau at 7 from 1967 to 1977, and subsided to 4 in 1996. This is the similar case with the trend of Fuel, light and power, which was 5 from 1967 to 1977 and ebbed to 4 in 1996. What is worth mentioning is that Other items not making its debut until 1977 and remained stable at 1% from 1977 to 1996.
小新老师好~贴上第一节课的曲线作文,第一次写,麻烦批改一下,谢谢啦~
红书 P72
All the statistics can be categorized three stages with equilibrium of both rates from 1900 to 1910, and the predominance of birth rate from 1910 to 1930 and death rate in the rest of year.
In the first decade of 20 century,the birth rate remained stable.Then it leapt reaching a peak of 60 per thousand in 1920 and dipt of nearly 20 per thousand in 1940.Finally,it fluctuated evenly between 1940 and 1970.On the other hand,the death rate crept down from 1900 to 1930.Later, it soared tremendously reaching a summit of 50 per thousand in 1940.In the last,we can witness an ebb in the per thousand of 30 in 1970.
上面那个是破纸第七页的 完全按照老师您上课说的写出来得 麻烦点评一下拉 谢谢！
破纸P7
All the trends can be categorized into three groups, with increasing in items such as Housing, decreasing in items including Food, fluctuating in House goods and services, and stabilizing in other items.
From the table, we saw a fluctuating in Household goods and services, reaching the apex at 14% in 1996, bottoming out at 7% in 1977. So did the Transport and communications. There was also an accrue in Housing, averaging out at nearly 14%, and this was the similar case with the trend of Recreation entertainment and education, which was the contrary to the trend of Tobacco. Besides that, Alcoholic drink reached a plateau at 7% in 1967 and ebb away to 4% in 1996, this is true of Fuel, light and power. Simultaneously, Clothing and footwear undulated within a range of 3%. Otherwise, Other items, not making its debut until 1977, remained stable at 1%
破纸P9
All the trends can be categorized into three groups, with creeping up in Agriculture of Britain, booming in Finance and Computer industry of China respectively, fluctuating in CI, Finance and ML of Britain and ML of China, falling only in Agriculture of China.
The CI of China soared, reaching a summit at 40% in 2000, hitting a trough at 5% in 1970, we also can witness a undulating in ML of Britain, reaching an apex at 61% in 1970, bottoming out at 20% in 1990, and this was the opposite of the trend of CI of Britain. The fluctuating in Finance of Britain and the subsiding in Agriculture of China were within a range of 10% and 30% respectively.
Simultaneously, ML of china was mutable during the years, averaging out at nearly 30%, and that is the contrary to the Finance of China. There was a creeping up in Agriculture of Britain, striking a balance at nearly 20%.
What is worth mentioning is that since the overall percentages of Britain add up to above 100% in 1970, it indicates the fact that some people were engaged in several industries.
红书P78
As is revealed in the pie charts, the percentages of a major source of energy in the US fluctuated comparatively dramatically during 1970 and 1980.
In 1970, coal covered analogously a majority of the electric energy production in the US, while nuclear accounted for a tiny margin of it. Meanwhile, 12%, 16% the electric energy production was shared by oil and hydro respectively. The remaining 24% was due to the natural gas. However in 1980 the percentage of coal crept up by 4%. Also, between 1970 and 1980, the electric energy production was up 10-fold. On the other hand, the percentage of natural gas in1980 reduced nearly twice as much as that in 1970, and hydro fell down gently from 16% to 12%. Despite the rising and the falling, oil almost maintain stable at nearly 11%.
What is mentioning is that since almost each percentage of the electric energy production varies, it implies the fact that the new energy will be made sufficient use of by more people although the old still plays a significant role in the energy production.
小新老师，我是Y139班的，8月25号考。你上课说的哪些是8月份的考题，哪些是9月的考题我上课没记清楚～嘿嘿～老师再说一下8月的吧～
不胜感激～
Pie chart
Red book P78
The energy sources of the United States electric energy production made up different percentages in 1980 from those in 1970. Among the five major sources of energy are nuclear, coal, natural gas, hydro and oil, some increased whereas others decreased.
In 1997, Coal took up comparatively a majority of the electric energy production, with 47% while Nuclear accounted for a minority with only 1%. 12% of the electric energy production should be shared by oil and 16% by Hydro. The rest 24% was due to Natural Gas.
The year of 1998 saw a significant 11 folds growth in the percentage of Nuclear, and the percentage of Coal also rose gently to 51%. On the contrary, there was a subsidence in both Hydro and Natural Gas, with 4% and 9% respectively. What is worth mentioning is that in those two years the energy production from Oil almost kept stagnant at nearly 11%.
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please hava a look & give me a band, thanks!
小新，你不是说会有个YP119的那个什么主题的在你的BOLG上么？怎么还找不到？
P.S: Thanks a lot for your teaching. and also thank you for the new message of IELTS!
小新老师，这是我写的剑4第54页的小作文，初次练笔，请老师多多指正。
As is showed in the graph,the demand for electricity in England varied sharply both in summer and winter.To a certain extent,these two trends are similar with each other and can
be categorized into 4 stage with falling from 3:00 to 9:00,rising during 9:00 to
14:00,stablizing form 15:00 to 21:00 and fluctuating in the rest of the day.
The tendacy in winter almost leaps and dips evenly during 3:00 to 14:00,and the reachs a plateau in the following 7 hours.After that it surges again,reaching a summit at about
45000 in 10 at night and finally vocillates in the middle night.
This is almost the same case with the trend in summer which with nearly half of the total units in winter.Also we can witness a few differents.The demands for electricity abates during 0:00 to 3:00 in summer which is contrary to its counterparts in winter.As well there is a zenith at approximately 20000 in 2 pm in summer and the peak time appears one hour later at night than in winter.
Turn to figure 2, according to the pie chart,30% of the units is shared be lighting,TV,radio and vacuum cleaners,food mixers,electric tools equally,with both 15% respectively;Heating rooms,Heating water accounts for a majority of the total units with 52%;the remaining 17.5% is due to ovens,kettles,washing machines.
It appears the fact that the total units in winter is twice as it is in summer mainly because of the necessity of heating rooms and heating water in cold days.